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Title: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mehhlab Baloch on February 16, 2007, 03:57:43 PM
abhi jab palat kar
dekh leti hon
un morda lamhon ki taraf
jo kabhi
sada bahar huwa karte thay
jin k ghaney saye main
kayee rishtey jiya kartey thay
kayee log
aabad huwa kartey thay
yad rakha kartey thay
ab dharkanon se mehhroom
wo lamhey
mohabbat ko kostey hain
kiyonke,
mohabbat...
wo aakhiri saans hay
mere tamam rishton ki
is se barh kar
koi mujhey de na saka
meri chahat jo bhari
tou mujhey chorh gaye...
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Sheh Mureed on February 16, 2007, 06:25:24 PM
Very nice  E:D3
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mehhlab Baloch on February 16, 2007, 06:45:11 PM
Thank u dear....
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Nohani on February 18, 2007, 11:40:52 PM
wonderful work Mehhlab  :)
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mehhlab Baloch on February 18, 2007, 11:48:30 PM
Thank U Dear Nohani... :)
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mahnaaz on February 18, 2007, 11:54:19 PM
(F)بهت خوب مهلب۔
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mehhlab Baloch on February 19, 2007, 12:18:15 AM
Thanks alot Sis Mahnaaz  :)
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: گوادری Gwaduri on February 19, 2007, 12:58:35 PM
abhi jab palat kar
dekh leti hon
un morda lamhon ki taraf
jo kabhi
sada bahar huwa karte thay
jin k ghaney saye main
kayee rishtey jiya kartey thay
kayee log
aabad huwa kartey thay
yad rakha kartey thay
ab dharkanon se mehhroom
wo lamhey
mohabbat ko kostey hain
kiyonke,
mohabbat...
wo aakhiri saans hay
mere tamam rishton ki
is se barh kar
koi mujhey de na saka
meri chahat jo bhari
tou mujhey chorh gaye...

Nice Plot  |||o

buttttttttttttt

I am really not clear abt something......in the poem...

wht actually died down... lamhey, rishtey or mohabbat...

Mehhlab u said.....and i quote

abhi jab palat kar
dekh leti hon
un morda lamhon ki taraf


and

ab dharkanon se mehhroom
wo lamhey mohabbat ko kostey hain


Murda lamhey mohabbat ko kaise kos sakti hain.....

and i dont find any link between the conclusion with the rest of the poem

is se barh kar
koi mujhey de na saka
meri chahat jo bhari
tou mujhey chorh gaye


apart from my illogical comments the idea and creativity is really excellent :clap:





Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mehhlab Baloch on February 19, 2007, 03:16:51 PM
Well
Dear Gwaduri, first of all i must thank u for ur observations....but it really is strange to explain poetry but u may have not payed attention to somethings...
the "lamhey"  which are offcourse provided by a "person"...  and that is the "rishta" and these are all connected with and cleard by one word "koi"
"koi mujhey de na saka"
now i guess if u read it again u will understand it ...i hope
and "morda lamhey" chon complain kanan ????
Man nazaneen  :)
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Deedag on February 19, 2007, 11:37:09 PM
Well
Dear Gwaduri, first of all i must thank u for ur observations....but it really is strange to explain poetry but u may have not payed attention to somethings...
the "lamhey"  which are offcourse provided by a "person"...  and that is the "rishta" and these are all connected with and cleard by one word "koi"
"koi mujhey de na saka"
now i guess if u read it again u will understand it ...i hope
and "morda lamhey" chon complain kanan ????
Man nazaneen  :)

poetry mein sab jaiz hai. excellent work miss mehhlab
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mehhlab Baloch on February 20, 2007, 07:34:41 PM
Thanks alot Deedag...
poetry mai sub koch jaiz hay...
magar poetry ko explain karna bohuth moshkill hay or BAD hay....(for Gwaduri)

Thnx again....
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mahgul on February 21, 2007, 01:24:20 PM
Superb sis mehhlab... keep it up...
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mehhlab Baloch on February 21, 2007, 04:12:48 PM
Thanks Alot Dear Mahgul. :)
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Post by: Atharag on February 21, 2007, 07:00:23 PM
baaz juwan inth balay................mayosi gunah inth :)
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Post by: Alhaan on February 21, 2007, 07:16:57 PM
very nice. :)
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mehhlab Baloch on February 21, 2007, 07:49:29 PM
baaz juwan inth balay................mayosi gunah inth :)

Insaan takey gonahh makanth aayee kass insan nalaikeeth...it s only to prove that im amongest Ashraf-u-l makhlookath... :)
Any ways thanks alot...

And I must thank Alhaan,too
Thank u very much
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Atharag on February 22, 2007, 02:52:05 PM

Mani Gapa dila mazoor man harchi shair a thoka desth hama wad nibishta kuth  :)                          
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mehhlab Baloch on February 22, 2007, 08:16:17 PM
Naa Dear never u have the right to say what u feel... u r free....as free as breeze... and i never mind comments...
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Imtiaz Ali Musa on February 23, 2007, 08:32:04 PM

hi,,,,, your peoms are nice.......
 (yh)
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mehhlab Baloch on February 23, 2007, 08:37:34 PM
Thank U my Dear Imtiaz
Thanks alot :)
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Perozai R!nd on March 05, 2007, 01:39:39 PM
Nice Poem Sis...
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: ضیا بلوچ Zia Baloch on March 17, 2007, 12:18:20 AM
moHtarama Mehlab sis, aadaab !!

aap ki nazm ka Khayaal bahut pasand aaaya ! daad qubool kejiye ! aur yooNhi likhtii rahiye ! shukriya

Zia Baloch
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mehhlab Baloch on April 10, 2007, 01:52:35 PM
Thank u dear Zia Baloch...
Well,
to some extent i have left writing poetry but if ever i start again will try my best to write better...
Thanks anyways
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: baloch777 on May 23, 2008, 01:01:55 AM
MashAllah very NICE poetry..Keep it up Sis..
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Arman on May 23, 2008, 09:27:27 AM
abhi jab palat kar
dekh leti hon
un morda lamhon ki taraf
jo kabhi
sada bahar huwa karte thay
jin k ghaney saye main
kayee rishtey jiya kartey thay
kayee log
aabad huwa kartey thay
yad rakha kartey thay
ab dharkanon se mehhroom
wo lamhey
mohabbat ko kostey hain
kiyonke,
mohabbat...
wo aakhiri saans hay
mere tamam rishton ki
is se barh kar
koi mujhey de na saka
meri chahat jo bhari
tou mujhey chorh gaye...
wa wa bohot dard bhari kahani he..
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mehhlab Baloch on July 05, 2008, 06:57:30 PM
Hmmm....
Arman sahab itni bhi nae jitni apko lagi.... because "it does not hurt when i breath" :)

anywayz thanks for reading it n feeling the Dard in it that could only be felt by the one full of dard... or Dard pe Wa Wa... very bad!!!
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Arman on July 12, 2008, 03:10:39 PM
Hmmm....
Arman sahab itni bhi nae jitni apko lagi.... because "it does not hurt when i breath" :)

anywayz thanks for reading it n feeling the Dard in it that could only be felt by the one full of dard... or Dard pe Wa Wa... very bad!!!
thankx for what, i read it for myself & felt a little joy coz there are so many ppl around us who are still living with some memories. means when it hurts does not mean life should be stopped.
dear i know when u breath it does not hurt you.
and by the way who said its bad to say wah wah. it just cheers up for a moment to me maybe not to you..
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Arman on July 12, 2008, 03:13:28 PM
and haan wht u said in ur signature;
chaand humari shikayatein nahi sunta,,, kis ne kaha taa keh chaand sunta hai k aapko ye kehne ki zaroorat padi?
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Mehhlab Baloch on July 12, 2008, 07:20:48 PM
Peace!
kisi ne nae ki hogi shekayat hum ne tou ki par chaand sunta he nae naa... khair just relax! i feel sorry for what i said i shouldnt have done so... nu wash...
salamat baatey...
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Hassan Janan Badini on July 13, 2008, 07:39:58 PM
sher int. bale jod bikan k balochi a sher nibishta bikan.
labz baz washain wade a sachag botag ant, bale mana dar ant ya na? wati sher a degre chaman bichar pada wati sher e bara a coments bidey.
ala e aman a
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: HABIB MOHAMMED SAEED on August 04, 2008, 02:22:16 PM
is kadar kyon ho mayos zindagi se. :(:)
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Post by: Hani Baloch on November 02, 2008, 01:40:15 PM
very gud dear mehlab keep it up
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Post by: Almiraan on November 02, 2008, 03:08:47 PM
 washshiyaani jambar tai sara s,nice poem   (y)washshiyaani-sachaan-tai-sara
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Aazar Baloch on November 08, 2008, 02:21:18 AM
mehlab tai shair baaz washe
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Imtiaz Ali Musa on September 11, 2009, 01:10:17 AM
very nice and deep thoughts....
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: TARIQ MAJEED on September 15, 2009, 04:42:54 PM

baaz wash allama to muhabbat a re shariyey lafz kamatag o bakshasta

Tariq Majeed

abhi jab palat kar
dekh leti hon
un morda lamhon ki taraf
jo kabhi
sada bahar huwa karte thay
jin k ghaney saye main
kayee rishtey jiya kartey thay
kayee log
aabad huwa kartey thay
yad rakha kartey thay
ab dharkanon se mehhroom
wo lamhey
mohabbat ko kostey hain
kiyonke,
mohabbat...
wo aakhiri saans hay
mere tamam rishton ki
is se barh kar
koi mujhey de na saka
meri chahat jo bhari
tou mujhey chorh gaye...
washshiyaani jambar tai sara s
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: Hameed Maoj حميد موج on March 20, 2010, 12:51:10 PM
baaz wash banok mehhlab
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: shah baloch on March 20, 2010, 06:00:45 PM
 banoken-gohaar durout (yh) (yh) (yh) (yh)
 banok mehlab baz vsh o jawn
Title: Re: ","Mohabbat, Wo Aakhiri Saans","
Post by: fairybaloch on March 20, 2010, 10:25:06 PM
GOUHAR MEHLAB TAI SHAIRI BAAZ BAAZ WASHA  (ff) mashaAllah
 SHIRI LIKEGA YALA MAKA  :)
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