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Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
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Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
« Reply #1 on: April 17, 2008, 09:23:32 PM »
Mana rahe pesh nadare? Man ham cho gameeg a
Zend gamma anche anga borze ... gam tao deethan man ham deetha nee zend baraya che hayal e?

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Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
« Reply #2 on: April 18, 2008, 03:35:45 AM »
Wa mani dil jala saheer , gud.

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Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
« Reply #3 on: April 18, 2008, 03:17:18 PM »
Waja Meerin Baloch I Mean LOD Raah e Pamman Wat Dar Nait Pa Tao Man Cheto Shohaz Bekana`n... Lol

Asim Jan MAn Dil Jale Naya`n Waja Dil Jale Waja Meerin Baluch Int Mani Hayala Raast Gosht Man Meerin?? lol


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Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
« Reply #4 on: April 18, 2008, 07:32:45 PM »
Waja Meerin Baloch I Mean LOD Raah e Pamman Wat Dar Nait Pa Tao Man Cheto Shohaz Bekana`n... Lol

Yeke mana nazara'e pesh dari fakt aa nazara taha darde .... man modam rawan mana aame nazara pesh darag bi ... Baly ama Zend ke ayea taha stand zeerag mabi sak nezoren zende ... Mana nazara wa pesh darag bi baly rah souj dayag nabi ke nazara goma zenda chon gwazent kane ... Ayea nazara ama wahda mukamal bit ke aa mana nazara wa pesh dari baly rahe ham souj bedaan ....

Dard ech wash nah ent  O darde bayan ham ech wash nah ent ama wahda ke tao zaroorate degrani....


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Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
« Reply #5 on: April 18, 2008, 07:50:40 PM »
Meeren Baluch Tayi Gap Raast o Wash Ant.. O Brat Yak Gappe Mana ALLAH e Shukr int Chushein Ech Ghum Nest Ke Pa Aa Ghume Waasta Mun Ee Sher likkita,, Its Just Imaginary...


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Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
« Reply #6 on: April 20, 2008, 10:51:07 PM »
bro fahad Aap ki poetry to bohot khob hay ,,,

khabi has ker to khabi ro ker guzarti ja rahi hay
ye zindagi bhi kiya ajeeb khel khelti ja rahi hay

ye shar acha laga :)

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Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
« Reply #7 on: April 21, 2008, 12:51:13 AM »
bro fahad Aap ki poetry to bohot khob hay ,,,

khabi has ker to khabi ro ker guzarti ja rahi hay
ye zindagi bhi kiya ajeeb khel khelti ja rahi hay

ye shar acha laga :)



Bohot Bohot Shukria Sis Naheed... Ye Sab Tho Aapki Help Hai Jo Hamesha Aap Mera Help Karti Hein.. Thankx For Ur Help..


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Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
« Reply #8 on: April 21, 2008, 02:15:05 AM »
Baaz ranga zeerag bit kana e labz ke tao nebishtaga
Har yeke wati range hesaba zort kant e labza
Parcha ke zend yek ent o zend taha Kadi washi o kadi dard hast O ame tei sarhaal (Topic) ent ....
Baly mukamal ama wahda bi ke tao dard e goma fight e sabak dae



It is easy to share Pain ... But difficult to share solution of problems and Baluch nation needs solutions .. pain already they are having ...

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Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
« Reply #9 on: April 21, 2008, 11:04:17 AM »
Baaz ranga zeerag bit kana e labz ke tao nebishtaga
Har yeke wati range hesaba zort kant e labza
Parcha ke zend yek ent o zend taha Kadi washi o kadi dard hast O ame tei sarhaal (Topic) ent ....
Baly mukamal ama wahda bi ke tao dard e goma fight e sabak dae



It is easy to share Pain ... But difficult to share solution of problems and Baluch nation needs solutions .. pain already they are having ...

Chonahiya ta’o raast gwashe bale ey gap ham watee jagayaa allamaent keh insaan peysara dard e ehsaas a kant randaa aahiya chey deyr kapag e raah pattet.

Bale rah dargeyjag a chey peysar aa wa allama bezant keh ey dard e haqeeqat cheyent.
Agan’ chush mabutten’ goraa Ata Shad a ey nagoshtaga:

Zend pa jeeRag o marg pah moodaga aasaan nabant
oshken’ nendag o zaari zaarehaan guzraan nabant

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Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
« Reply #10 on: April 21, 2008, 03:51:45 PM »
bro fahad Aap ki poetry to bohot khob hay ,,,

khabi has ker to khabi ro ker guzarti ja rahi hay
ye zindagi bhi kiya ajeeb khel khelti ja rahi hay

ye shar acha laga :)




This whole ghazal, if it is a ghazal,  simplysucks.. specially the above mentioned shair....


i mean there r predominately two conditions in a person's life.. good or bad... so wht is strange abt tht...


Fahad i m really sorry mate...
Maara Tappi Kotag Hama Teera
Anga tai dedage kamaan'a hain

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Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
« Reply #11 on: April 21, 2008, 06:18:28 PM »
Ahmed Should It Be Essential To Have Some Stranges In Any Creativity?? If Yeah Then I Am Sorry Coz I Have Used Commons...

No Need To Say Sorry Ahmed... Its Ok For Me But Infact I am Happy To Know The Errors I Do....


Thankx For U Waja Meeren-baluch & Sis Mahaal For Having Discussion On The Topic..


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Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
« Reply #12 on: April 21, 2008, 10:42:06 PM »
bro fahad Aap ki poetry to bohot khob hay ,,,

khabi has ker to khabi ro ker guzarti ja rahi hay
ye zindagi bhi kiya ajeeb khel khelti ja rahi hay

ye shar acha laga :)




This whole ghazal, if it is a ghazal,  simplysucks.. specially the above mentioned shair....


i mean there r predominately two conditions in a person's life.. good or bad... so wht is strange abt tht...


Fahad i m really sorry mate...

Bacha Tao insaan nabey na ! :)


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Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
« Reply #13 on: April 29, 2008, 11:26:43 AM »
Fahad Bhai:
purKhulooS tasleemaat,

aane meN taaKheer hoovii tu kuch bahec e taaKheer bhi thee.

go keh maiN is laRii (topic) meN kuch kehne kee khwahish naheeN rakhtee thee kyouNkeh aap abhi seekhne ke marHale meN heN aur abhi is raah e shauq (shaairee ke medaan meN) meN kaheN saare moR aage aane heN jahaN se guzre baGhair aap sherii adab meN Khud ko manwaa naheeN sakte.

aur chonkeh abhi aap ne likhne ka safar shuruu kiyaa hai tu meree naZar meN aap par is marHale meN rok tok karna  na-munasib hai.
lekin arakeen e bazm kee guftugu se paidaa hone waalii uljhan ko madd e naZar rakhte hoove aap ke liYe chand baateN kehnaa chahoongii is yaqeen ke saath keh aap inheN macbat lenge.

1. shaa,iree Khuda daad SalaHiyat ka naam tu hai hee jo qismat se miltee hai lekin saath hee sher goyii ek fan bhi hai jiske israar o ramooz jaane baGhair aap kee taKhleeq she'r kee Heciyat se adabii HalqooN meN qaabil e qubool naheeN ho saktee.

2. Yeh Zaroorii naheN hotaa keh jis insaan kee kitaab market meN aa chukii hai woh ek baRaa shaa,ir ho. baRaa shaa,ir woh hota hai jiska she'r paRhne waale ko ba'ad meN bhi yaad rahe. :)

chaYe Urdu Adab leN yaa Baluchi adab ham us shaa,ir ko apna pasandeedah shaa,ir kehte heN jiska she'r, she'ree asraar o ramooz ko pooraa karne ke saath saath paRhne waale ke dil meN ghar kar le.

3. acha likhne ke liYe acha paRhnaa bohat zaroorii hai. aur kisee bhi zabaan meN aap likheN us zabaan par aap kaa mukammal uboor honaa laazim hai.
iskee micaal is taraH se leejiye keh maiN alhumdulillah jiddi pushtii Baloch hooN lekin Balochii adab ke chonkeh mujhe israar o ramoz naheeN pata isliYe bawajood thoRaa bohat likhne ke maiN khud ko is medaan se khaarij samajhtee hooN.
lekin yeh naheeN hai keh maiN koshish tark kar dooN. koshish ke saath saath ache adab ka mutalieha aur Khud se behtar likhne waalooN kee aaraa aur rehnumayii meree un tamaam kamzoriyoN ko waqt ke saath saath door kar de gee jo is waqt meree Baluchi sha,iree meN maujood hai.
mera yahii mashavarah isee Hikmat e a'mlii ke saath apnaane ke liYe aap ko doongii.

4. aap apnii Urdu shaairee ko baareekii se samajhne ke liYe koshish keejiye keh un eHbaab kee SuHbat iKhtiyaar keejiye jo tanqeed baraYe iSlaaH ke qaa,il hooN. micaal ke taur par is laRii meN dekhiye yeh shaa,ir koyii nau-aamoz ShaKhSiyat naheeN hai balkeh kauna-mashqooN meN iskaa shumaar hota hai:
http://bazm.urduanjuman.com/index.php?topic=2029.0


4. ek acha shaa,ir a'am see baat ko KhaaS andaaz se baYaan karta hai. she'r ke har do miSrooN ka baham rabt^ bohat zarooii hai. aur yeh hotee kyaa cheez hai iske liYe ache shaa,iroN  ke kalaam ko paRhnaa aur samajhnaa bohat zaroori hai.

Ahmad (Gwadari) ne aap se yeh kahaa keh insaan kee zindagi meN ache aur bure donoN hee Halaat hote hee heN aur ise aam alfaaz meN bayaan karne kar dene meN kaun see baRee baat hai. aur unkee yeh baat apnii jaga durust hai.

aap ne kahaa

kabhi hans ke tu kabhi ro ke guzartii jaa rahii hai
yeh zindagi ajeeb khail kheltii jaa rahii hai

is she'r meN bayaan bhi kamzor hai  aur Khayaal bhi aaam saa hai aur donoN miSrooN ka baham rabt^ bhi naheeN hai.

sab se baRee kamzorii yeh hai keh aap ne mushkil radeef ka intiKhaab kiyaa hai  "jaa rahii hai " jise nibhanaa asaan naheeN hai.
aap apnii "koshish" aasaan radeef peh keejiye aur phir waqt ke saath saath mushkil kee taraf aahiYe.

baRe shaurah kee asaan GhazlooN ko saamne rakhiye aur un zameenoN par Khud se likhne kee koshish keejiye.

maiN filwaqt aapko yeh mashvarah doongii keh bajaYe mujhe aur Naheed ko consider karne ke aap Urdu ke maane hoove ehl e qalam kee nighaarishaat aur taKhleeqaat ko paRhiye aur unheN samajhhiye phir dekhiye aap ke qalam meN kyaa taceer paida hotee hai.


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Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
« Reply #14 on: April 29, 2008, 09:05:28 PM »
Fahad Bhai:
purKhulooS tasleemaat,

aane meN taaKheer hoovii tu kuch bahec e taaKheer bhi thee.

go keh maiN is laRii (topic) meN kuch kehne kee khwahish naheeN rakhtee thee kyouNkeh aap abhi seekhne ke marHale meN heN aur abhi is raah e shauq (shaairee ke medaan meN) meN kaheN saare moR aage aane heN jahaN se guzre baGhair aap sherii adab meN Khud ko manwaa naheeN sakte.

aur chonkeh abhi aap ne likhne ka safar shuruu kiyaa hai tu meree naZar meN aap par is marHale meN rok tok karna  na-munasib hai.
lekin arakeen e bazm kee guftugu se paidaa hone waalii uljhan ko madd e naZar rakhte hoove aap ke liYe chand baateN kehnaa chahoongii is yaqeen ke saath keh aap inheN macbat lenge.

1. shaa,iree Khuda daad SalaHiyat ka naam tu hai hee jo qismat se miltee hai lekin saath hee sher goyii ek fan bhi hai jiske israar o ramooz jaane baGhair aap kee taKhleeq she'r kee Heciyat se adabii HalqooN meN qaabil e qubool naheeN ho saktee.

2. Yeh Zaroorii naheN hotaa keh jis insaan kee kitaab market meN aa chukii hai woh ek baRaa shaa,ir ho. baRaa shaa,ir woh hota hai jiska she'r paRhne waale ko ba'ad meN bhi yaad rahe. :)

chaYe Urdu Adab leN yaa Baluchi adab ham us shaa,ir ko apna pasandeedah shaa,ir kehte heN jiska she'r, she'ree asraar o ramooz ko pooraa karne ke saath saath paRhne waale ke dil meN ghar kar le.

3. acha likhne ke liYe acha paRhnaa bohat zaroorii hai. aur kisee bhi zabaan meN aap likheN us zabaan par aap kaa mukammal uboor honaa laazim hai.
iskee micaal is taraH se leejiye keh maiN alhumdulillah jiddi pushtii Baloch hooN lekin Balochii adab ke chonkeh mujhe israar o ramoz naheeN pata isliYe bawajood thoRaa bohat likhne ke maiN khud ko is medaan se khaarij samajhtee hooN.
lekin yeh naheeN hai keh maiN koshish tark kar dooN. koshish ke saath saath ache adab ka mutalieha aur Khud se behtar likhne waalooN kee aaraa aur rehnumayii meree un tamaam kamzoriyoN ko waqt ke saath saath door kar de gee jo is waqt meree Baluchi sha,iree meN maujood hai.
mera yahii mashavarah isee Hikmat e a'mlii ke saath apnaane ke liYe aap ko doongii.

4. aap apnii Urdu shaairee ko baareekii se samajhne ke liYe koshish keejiye keh un eHbaab kee SuHbat iKhtiyaar keejiye jo tanqeed baraYe iSlaaH ke qaa,il hooN. micaal ke taur par is laRii meN dekhiye yeh shaa,ir koyii nau-aamoz ShaKhSiyat naheeN hai balkeh kauna-mashqooN meN iskaa shumaar hota hai:
http://bazm.urduanjuman.com/index.php?topic=2029.0


4. ek acha shaa,ir a'am see baat ko KhaaS andaaz se baYaan karta hai. she'r ke har do miSrooN ka baham rabt^ bohat zarooii hai. aur yeh hotee kyaa cheez hai iske liYe ache shaa,iroN  ke kalaam ko paRhnaa aur samajhnaa bohat zaroori hai.

Ahmad (Gwadari) ne aap se yeh kahaa keh insaan kee zindagi meN ache aur bure donoN hee Halaat hote hee heN aur ise aam alfaaz meN bayaan karne kar dene meN kaun see baRee baat hai. aur unkee yeh baat apnii jaga durust hai.

aap ne kahaa

kabhi hans ke tu kabhi ro ke guzartii jaa rahii hai
yeh zindagi ajeeb khail kheltii jaa rahii hai

is she'r meN bayaan bhi kamzor hai  aur Khayaal bhi aaam saa hai aur donoN miSrooN ka baham rabt^ bhi naheeN hai.

sab se baRee kamzorii yeh hai keh aap ne mushkil radeef ka intiKhaab kiyaa hai  "jaa rahii hai " jise nibhanaa asaan naheeN hai.
aap apnii "koshish" aasaan radeef peh keejiye aur phir waqt ke saath saath mushkil kee taraf aahiYe.

baRe shaurah kee asaan GhazlooN ko saamne rakhiye aur un zameenoN par Khud se likhne kee koshish keejiye.

maiN filwaqt aapko yeh mashvarah doongii keh bajaYe mujhe aur Naheed ko consider karne ke aap Urdu ke maane hoove ehl e qalam kee nighaarishaat aur taKhleeqaat ko paRhiye aur unheN samajhhiye phir dekhiye aap ke qalam meN kyaa taceer paida hotee hai.


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