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Title: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Perozai R!nd on April 17, 2008, 08:08:04 PM
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Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Meeren-Bluch on April 17, 2008, 09:23:32 PM
Mana rahe pesh nadare? Man ham cho gameeg a
Zend gamma anche anga borze ... gam tao deethan man ham deetha nee zend baraya che hayal e?
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Muhammad Asim Baloch on April 18, 2008, 03:35:45 AM
Wa mani dil jala saheer , gud.
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Perozai R!nd on April 18, 2008, 03:17:18 PM
Waja Meerin Baloch I Mean LOD Raah e Pamman Wat Dar Nait Pa Tao Man Cheto Shohaz Bekana`n... Lol

Asim Jan MAn Dil Jale Naya`n Waja Dil Jale Waja Meerin Baluch Int Mani Hayala Raast Gosht Man Meerin?? lol
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Meeren-Bluch on April 18, 2008, 07:32:45 PM
Waja Meerin Baloch I Mean LOD Raah e Pamman Wat Dar Nait Pa Tao Man Cheto Shohaz Bekana`n... Lol

Yeke mana nazara'e pesh dari fakt aa nazara taha darde .... man modam rawan mana aame nazara pesh darag bi ... Baly ama Zend ke ayea taha stand zeerag mabi sak nezoren zende ... Mana nazara wa pesh darag bi baly rah souj dayag nabi ke nazara goma zenda chon gwazent kane ... Ayea nazara ama wahda mukamal bit ke aa mana nazara wa pesh dari baly rahe ham souj bedaan ....

Dard ech wash nah ent  O darde bayan ham ech wash nah ent ama wahda ke tao zaroorate degrani....

Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Perozai R!nd on April 18, 2008, 07:50:40 PM
Meeren Baluch Tayi Gap Raast o Wash Ant.. O Brat Yak Gappe Mana ALLAH e Shukr int Chushein Ech Ghum Nest Ke Pa Aa Ghume Waasta Mun Ee Sher likkita,, Its Just Imaginary...
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: ناہید بلوچ Naheed Baloch on April 20, 2008, 10:51:07 PM
bro fahad Aap ki poetry to bohot khob hay ,,,

khabi has ker to khabi ro ker guzarti ja rahi hay
ye zindagi bhi kiya ajeeb khel khelti ja rahi hay

ye shar acha laga :)

Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Perozai R!nd on April 21, 2008, 12:51:13 AM
bro fahad Aap ki poetry to bohot khob hay ,,,

khabi has ker to khabi ro ker guzarti ja rahi hay
ye zindagi bhi kiya ajeeb khel khelti ja rahi hay

ye shar acha laga :)



Bohot Bohot Shukria Sis Naheed... Ye Sab Tho Aapki Help Hai Jo Hamesha Aap Mera Help Karti Hein.. Thankx For Ur Help..
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Meeren-Bluch on April 21, 2008, 02:15:05 AM
Baaz ranga zeerag bit kana e labz ke tao nebishtaga
Har yeke wati range hesaba zort kant e labza
Parcha ke zend yek ent o zend taha Kadi washi o kadi dard hast O ame tei sarhaal (Topic) ent ....
Baly mukamal ama wahda bi ke tao dard e goma fight e sabak dae



It is easy to share Pain ... But difficult to share solution of problems and Baluch nation needs solutions .. pain already they are having ...
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Maahal Baloch on April 21, 2008, 11:04:17 AM
Baaz ranga zeerag bit kana e labz ke tao nebishtaga
Har yeke wati range hesaba zort kant e labza
Parcha ke zend yek ent o zend taha Kadi washi o kadi dard hast O ame tei sarhaal (Topic) ent ....
Baly mukamal ama wahda bi ke tao dard e goma fight e sabak dae



It is easy to share Pain ... But difficult to share solution of problems and Baluch nation needs solutions .. pain already they are having ...

Chonahiya ta’o raast gwashe bale ey gap ham watee jagayaa allamaent keh insaan peysara dard e ehsaas a kant randaa aahiya chey deyr kapag e raah pattet.

Bale rah dargeyjag a chey peysar aa wa allama bezant keh ey dard e haqeeqat cheyent.
Agan’ chush mabutten’ goraa Ata Shad a ey nagoshtaga:

Zend pa jeeRag o marg pah moodaga aasaan nabant
oshken’ nendag o zaari zaarehaan guzraan nabant
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: گوادری Gwaduri on April 21, 2008, 03:51:45 PM
bro fahad Aap ki poetry to bohot khob hay ,,,

khabi has ker to khabi ro ker guzarti ja rahi hay
ye zindagi bhi kiya ajeeb khel khelti ja rahi hay

ye shar acha laga :)




This whole ghazal, if it is a ghazal,  simplysucks.. specially the above mentioned shair....


i mean there r predominately two conditions in a person's life.. good or bad... so wht is strange abt tht...


Fahad i m really sorry mate...
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Perozai R!nd on April 21, 2008, 06:18:28 PM
Ahmed Should It Be Essential To Have Some Stranges In Any Creativity?? If Yeah Then I Am Sorry Coz I Have Used Commons...

No Need To Say Sorry Ahmed... Its Ok For Me But Infact I am Happy To Know The Errors I Do....


Thankx For U Waja Meeren-baluch & Sis Mahaal For Having Discussion On The Topic..
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Shahid Baloch on April 21, 2008, 10:42:06 PM
bro fahad Aap ki poetry to bohot khob hay ,,,

khabi has ker to khabi ro ker guzarti ja rahi hay
ye zindagi bhi kiya ajeeb khel khelti ja rahi hay

ye shar acha laga :)




This whole ghazal, if it is a ghazal,  simplysucks.. specially the above mentioned shair....


i mean there r predominately two conditions in a person's life.. good or bad... so wht is strange abt tht...


Fahad i m really sorry mate...

Bacha Tao insaan nabey na ! :)
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Zahida Raees Raji on April 29, 2008, 11:26:43 AM
Fahad Bhai:
purKhulooS tasleemaat,

aane meN taaKheer hoovii tu kuch bahec e taaKheer bhi thee.

go keh maiN is laRii (topic) meN kuch kehne kee khwahish naheeN rakhtee thee kyouNkeh aap abhi seekhne ke marHale meN heN aur abhi is raah e shauq (shaairee ke medaan meN) meN kaheN saare moR aage aane heN jahaN se guzre baGhair aap sherii adab meN Khud ko manwaa naheeN sakte.

aur chonkeh abhi aap ne likhne ka safar shuruu kiyaa hai tu meree naZar meN aap par is marHale meN rok tok karna  na-munasib hai.
lekin arakeen e bazm kee guftugu se paidaa hone waalii uljhan ko madd e naZar rakhte hoove aap ke liYe chand baateN kehnaa chahoongii is yaqeen ke saath keh aap inheN macbat lenge.

1. shaa,iree Khuda daad SalaHiyat ka naam tu hai hee jo qismat se miltee hai lekin saath hee sher goyii ek fan bhi hai jiske israar o ramooz jaane baGhair aap kee taKhleeq she'r kee Heciyat se adabii HalqooN meN qaabil e qubool naheeN ho saktee.

2. Yeh Zaroorii naheN hotaa keh jis insaan kee kitaab market meN aa chukii hai woh ek baRaa shaa,ir ho. baRaa shaa,ir woh hota hai jiska she'r paRhne waale ko ba'ad meN bhi yaad rahe. :)

chaYe Urdu Adab leN yaa Baluchi adab ham us shaa,ir ko apna pasandeedah shaa,ir kehte heN jiska she'r, she'ree asraar o ramooz ko pooraa karne ke saath saath paRhne waale ke dil meN ghar kar le.

3. acha likhne ke liYe acha paRhnaa bohat zaroorii hai. aur kisee bhi zabaan meN aap likheN us zabaan par aap kaa mukammal uboor honaa laazim hai.
iskee micaal is taraH se leejiye keh maiN alhumdulillah jiddi pushtii Baloch hooN lekin Balochii adab ke chonkeh mujhe israar o ramoz naheeN pata isliYe bawajood thoRaa bohat likhne ke maiN khud ko is medaan se khaarij samajhtee hooN.
lekin yeh naheeN hai keh maiN koshish tark kar dooN. koshish ke saath saath ache adab ka mutalieha aur Khud se behtar likhne waalooN kee aaraa aur rehnumayii meree un tamaam kamzoriyoN ko waqt ke saath saath door kar de gee jo is waqt meree Baluchi sha,iree meN maujood hai.
mera yahii mashavarah isee Hikmat e a'mlii ke saath apnaane ke liYe aap ko doongii.

4. aap apnii Urdu shaairee ko baareekii se samajhne ke liYe koshish keejiye keh un eHbaab kee SuHbat iKhtiyaar keejiye jo tanqeed baraYe iSlaaH ke qaa,il hooN. micaal ke taur par is laRii meN dekhiye yeh shaa,ir koyii nau-aamoz ShaKhSiyat naheeN hai balkeh kauna-mashqooN meN iskaa shumaar hota hai:
http://bazm.urduanjuman.com/index.php?topic=2029.0


4. ek acha shaa,ir a'am see baat ko KhaaS andaaz se baYaan karta hai. she'r ke har do miSrooN ka baham rabt^ bohat zarooii hai. aur yeh hotee kyaa cheez hai iske liYe ache shaa,iroN  ke kalaam ko paRhnaa aur samajhnaa bohat zaroori hai.

Ahmad (Gwadari) ne aap se yeh kahaa keh insaan kee zindagi meN ache aur bure donoN hee Halaat hote hee heN aur ise aam alfaaz meN bayaan karne kar dene meN kaun see baRee baat hai. aur unkee yeh baat apnii jaga durust hai.

aap ne kahaa

kabhi hans ke tu kabhi ro ke guzartii jaa rahii hai
yeh zindagi ajeeb khail kheltii jaa rahii hai

is she'r meN bayaan bhi kamzor hai  aur Khayaal bhi aaam saa hai aur donoN miSrooN ka baham rabt^ bhi naheeN hai.

sab se baRee kamzorii yeh hai keh aap ne mushkil radeef ka intiKhaab kiyaa hai  "jaa rahii hai " jise nibhanaa asaan naheeN hai.
aap apnii "koshish" aasaan radeef peh keejiye aur phir waqt ke saath saath mushkil kee taraf aahiYe.

baRe shaurah kee asaan GhazlooN ko saamne rakhiye aur un zameenoN par Khud se likhne kee koshish keejiye.

maiN filwaqt aapko yeh mashvarah doongii keh bajaYe mujhe aur Naheed ko consider karne ke aap Urdu ke maane hoove ehl e qalam kee nighaarishaat aur taKhleeqaat ko paRhiye aur unheN samajhhiye phir dekhiye aap ke qalam meN kyaa taceer paida hotee hai.


meree dua'aeN hameshah aap ke saath hongii.
 
Sada Khush raho

dua'a go

Aap kee Baaji
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Perozai R!nd on April 29, 2008, 09:05:28 PM
Fahad Bhai:
purKhulooS tasleemaat,

aane meN taaKheer hoovii tu kuch bahec e taaKheer bhi thee.

go keh maiN is laRii (topic) meN kuch kehne kee khwahish naheeN rakhtee thee kyouNkeh aap abhi seekhne ke marHale meN heN aur abhi is raah e shauq (shaairee ke medaan meN) meN kaheN saare moR aage aane heN jahaN se guzre baGhair aap sherii adab meN Khud ko manwaa naheeN sakte.

aur chonkeh abhi aap ne likhne ka safar shuruu kiyaa hai tu meree naZar meN aap par is marHale meN rok tok karna  na-munasib hai.
lekin arakeen e bazm kee guftugu se paidaa hone waalii uljhan ko madd e naZar rakhte hoove aap ke liYe chand baateN kehnaa chahoongii is yaqeen ke saath keh aap inheN macbat lenge.

1. shaa,iree Khuda daad SalaHiyat ka naam tu hai hee jo qismat se miltee hai lekin saath hee sher goyii ek fan bhi hai jiske israar o ramooz jaane baGhair aap kee taKhleeq she'r kee Heciyat se adabii HalqooN meN qaabil e qubool naheeN ho saktee.

2. Yeh Zaroorii naheN hotaa keh jis insaan kee kitaab market meN aa chukii hai woh ek baRaa shaa,ir ho. baRaa shaa,ir woh hota hai jiska she'r paRhne waale ko ba'ad meN bhi yaad rahe. :)

chaYe Urdu Adab leN yaa Baluchi adab ham us shaa,ir ko apna pasandeedah shaa,ir kehte heN jiska she'r, she'ree asraar o ramooz ko pooraa karne ke saath saath paRhne waale ke dil meN ghar kar le.

3. acha likhne ke liYe acha paRhnaa bohat zaroorii hai. aur kisee bhi zabaan meN aap likheN us zabaan par aap kaa mukammal uboor honaa laazim hai.
iskee micaal is taraH se leejiye keh maiN alhumdulillah jiddi pushtii Baloch hooN lekin Balochii adab ke chonkeh mujhe israar o ramoz naheeN pata isliYe bawajood thoRaa bohat likhne ke maiN khud ko is medaan se khaarij samajhtee hooN.
lekin yeh naheeN hai keh maiN koshish tark kar dooN. koshish ke saath saath ache adab ka mutalieha aur Khud se behtar likhne waalooN kee aaraa aur rehnumayii meree un tamaam kamzoriyoN ko waqt ke saath saath door kar de gee jo is waqt meree Baluchi sha,iree meN maujood hai.
mera yahii mashavarah isee Hikmat e a'mlii ke saath apnaane ke liYe aap ko doongii.

4. aap apnii Urdu shaairee ko baareekii se samajhne ke liYe koshish keejiye keh un eHbaab kee SuHbat iKhtiyaar keejiye jo tanqeed baraYe iSlaaH ke qaa,il hooN. micaal ke taur par is laRii meN dekhiye yeh shaa,ir koyii nau-aamoz ShaKhSiyat naheeN hai balkeh kauna-mashqooN meN iskaa shumaar hota hai:
http://bazm.urduanjuman.com/index.php?topic=2029.0


4. ek acha shaa,ir a'am see baat ko KhaaS andaaz se baYaan karta hai. she'r ke har do miSrooN ka baham rabt^ bohat zarooii hai. aur yeh hotee kyaa cheez hai iske liYe ache shaa,iroN  ke kalaam ko paRhnaa aur samajhnaa bohat zaroori hai.

Ahmad (Gwadari) ne aap se yeh kahaa keh insaan kee zindagi meN ache aur bure donoN hee Halaat hote hee heN aur ise aam alfaaz meN bayaan karne kar dene meN kaun see baRee baat hai. aur unkee yeh baat apnii jaga durust hai.

aap ne kahaa

kabhi hans ke tu kabhi ro ke guzartii jaa rahii hai
yeh zindagi ajeeb khail kheltii jaa rahii hai

is she'r meN bayaan bhi kamzor hai  aur Khayaal bhi aaam saa hai aur donoN miSrooN ka baham rabt^ bhi naheeN hai.

sab se baRee kamzorii yeh hai keh aap ne mushkil radeef ka intiKhaab kiyaa hai  "jaa rahii hai " jise nibhanaa asaan naheeN hai.
aap apnii "koshish" aasaan radeef peh keejiye aur phir waqt ke saath saath mushkil kee taraf aahiYe.

baRe shaurah kee asaan GhazlooN ko saamne rakhiye aur un zameenoN par Khud se likhne kee koshish keejiye.

maiN filwaqt aapko yeh mashvarah doongii keh bajaYe mujhe aur Naheed ko consider karne ke aap Urdu ke maane hoove ehl e qalam kee nighaarishaat aur taKhleeqaat ko paRhiye aur unheN samajhhiye phir dekhiye aap ke qalam meN kyaa taceer paida hotee hai.


meree dua'aeN hameshah aap ke saath hongii.
 
Sada Khush raho

dua'a go

Aap kee Baaji


Sis Raji Aapka Mein Behadd Mamnoon Hoo,n Keh Aap ne Tafseelan Mujhe Kuch Bataya... Thankx For That.
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Perozai R!nd on April 30, 2008, 10:42:50 AM
I Want to Tell All Of you Keh Mujhe Koi Shoq Nahi Hai Urdu Shairy Seekhne Ke Aur Naa Hee Mein Es Kaam Mein Joddojuhod Karunga Keh Mein Aik Acha Urdu Shaair Banoo,n Aur Na Hee Maine Kabhi Koshish Kee Hai... Jo Kuch Maine Likha Hai Sab Ghalat Ho,n Tho Ghalat Hee Sahi I Dont Care... Magr Jo Kuch Likhoonga Yaha`n Share Karoonga Agr Es Mein Koi Problem Hai Kisi Ko Tho I Dont Care.........  Bas Yahi Kuch Kehna Chahta Taa Mein...

Kisi Ka Dil Dukha Ho Meri Baato,n Se Tho Reason Bata Kar Keh Sakta Ya Sakti Hai....


Thank You!
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Zahida Raees Raji on April 30, 2008, 11:03:17 AM
I Want to Tell All Of you Keh Mujhe Koi Shoq Nahi Hai Urdu Shairy Seekhne Ke Aur Naa Hee Mein Es Kaam Mein Joddojuhod Karunga Keh Mein Aik Acha Urdu Shaair Banoo,n Aur Na Hee Maine Kabhi Koshish Kee Hai... Jo Kuch Maine Likha Hai Sab Ghalat Ho,n Tho Ghalat Hee Sahi I Dont Care... Magr Jo Kuch Likhoonga Yaha`n Share Karoonga Agr Es Mein Koi Problem Hai Kisi Ko Tho I Dont Care.........  Bas Yahi Kuch Kehna Chahta Taa Mein...

Kisi Ka Dil Dukha Ho Meri Baato,n Se Tho Reason Bata Kar Keh Sakta Ya Sakti Hai....


Thank You!

My dearest brother Fahad:
Salam o wahag,

meree baat se agar aap kee dil-aazarii hoovii hai tu uske liYe bohat ma'azrat Khwah hooN. mera maqSad aapkee rehnumaYii hai nah ke aap par be-jaa tanqeed.

aap ka Gussah baja hai iskee wajah Sirf yeh hai keh ab tak aap us  maHaul se door heN jahaN naye likhne waale iSlaaH aur rehnumaYii ke liye kaheeN saarii baateN bardasht karte heN.

ek baat hamesha yaad rakhiye keh jo insaan tanqeed bardasht kar leta hai woh zindagi meN kabhi na-kaam naheeN rehtaa.

tanqeed ke peeche, naaqid ka maqaSid kyaa ho sakta hai us ko zaroor naZar meN rakhiye.
meree aap se guzaarish hai keh yahaN tanqeed karne waaloN kee baatoN ko macbat leejiye kyaa faahidah jab chand saaloN ke ba'ad aap Khud itne qaabil ho jaheN keh in choTee choTee cheezoN ko samajh aur jaan sakeN aur tab aap ko is baat par sharmindagii ho keh aap ne apnii rehnumaYii karne waaloN ko Ghalat^ samajhtaa?

aap jo meHsoos karte heN use zaroor likhiYe aur yahaN share bhi keejiye mujhe bohat Khushii ho gii. yaqeen jaaniye koyii aap kee dil-aazarii naheeN chahtaa balkeh aap ko mazeed acha likhte hoove dekhnaa chahta hai.


dua'a go
aap kee baaji
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Perozai R!nd on April 30, 2008, 11:17:29 AM
Respected Sis Raji

Nahi Nahi Mujhe Yaha`n Kisi Se Shikayat Nahi Hai Aur Na Hee Mujhe Kisi Ki Baato`n Se Dil Aazaari Howi Hai...

Mein Bas Yahi Fact Batana Chahta Taa Keh Meine Kabhi Koshish Nahi Kee Hai K Mein Aik Acha Urdu Shair Banoo,n Aur Naa Hee Mujhe Interest Hai,,, Ye Jo Kuch Likha hai Just For Enjoyment...

Yaqeen Jaanye Mujhe Behadd Khushi Hoti Aap Logo,n K Mashware Aur Naseehat Mere Saath Hote Agr Really Mein Es Shairy Mein Shoqeen Hota Magr I have No Interest Aur Agr Jab Kabhi Likhoonga Tho YAha`n Baask Mein Share Karoonga Chaahe Ghalat Ho,n Ya Sahi...
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Hammal dashtiari on August 20, 2008, 08:40:48 AM
BEID RANJO JOUREN YAATAAN ZINDAGI
TAO MANA ICHI NADATA ZINDAGI
WAHAGE LAIBOK DASTA DATAGANT
TIFLEN DIL TAO CHOUN GALATA ZINDAGI
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: HABIB MOHAMMED SAEED on August 20, 2008, 10:14:32 AM
baaz wash baaz joan,,,lekha jo kismat main khuda ko yaad kya karna
                   jahaan bidard  sanam ho wahaan faryaad kya karna E|
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: Sassi of Kech on August 20, 2008, 09:49:42 PM
baaz wash baaz joan,,,lekha jo kismat main khuda ko yaad kya karna
                   jahaan bidard  sanam ho wahaan faryaad kya karna E|


Hay Man!!!

S it a mirror that u hold?????
put it down my dear fahad may not be serious but u r gonna cry........ :''(


Fahad u must not be serious about Shaeri ........

ye laddoo khana ap k bus ki bath nae hay!!!!!!! :hehe:
Title: Re: Kabhi Hans Ke Tho Kabhi --- By FNR
Post by: sammi on September 10, 2008, 10:08:00 PM
NA SHIKAYATEN NA GILA KARE KOI AISA SHAKHS HUA KARE
JO MERE LIYE HI SAJA KARE
JIS K ZULF MUJ PAR HAWA KARE
KHABI ROE JAE WO BE PANAH
KHABI BE TAHASHA UDAAS HO
KHABI CHUP KE CHUP KE DABE QADAM MERE PEECHE AAKE HANSA KARE
MERI QURBATEN MERI CHAHATEN KOI YAAD RAKHE QADAM QADAM
MEN BADE TAEWEEL SAFAR MEN HOON
MERI WAPSI KI DUA KARE
NA SHIKAYATEN NA GILA KARE